Raine's Spells

[Raine]

Name: Ice Magic: Ice Make
Type: Caster Magic
Element/Aspect: Ice
Description: Ice Make Magic revolves around the formation of items or animals which mimic the functions of the object they are formed into, though they are still only ice. Ex: An Ice Bird will Fly, an ice gun will fire ice.
Side Effects: n/a

Ice Mold: Senbon Needle
Tier: Base
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Offensive
Element: Ice
Range: Medium, anywhere in the casters POV up to 10 meters away.
Requirements: None
Effect: The caster forms a mist of ice In front of them and a single senbon needle is formed and is fired at a speed of 10 m/s up to a distance of 15 meters, the needle will stab into an opponent if no defense is brought up, also it may blown away with enough force as it is rather fragile yet sharp.
Cooldown: 2 post


Ice Mold: Wings
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10 (5 to maintain)
Type: Utility
Element: Ice
Range: Self
Requirements: None
Effect: The users form a pair of wings on their back and can use this to glide for an extended amount of time of around 3 post. Flame magic can melt them with ease and can be smashed with the aid of a 1 tier 1 spell or two base level spells to break.
Cooldown: 2 post.


Ice Mold: Barrier
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Defensive
Element: Ice
Range: Short
Requirements:
Effect: After cast, the user forms a large barrier(10 feet high, 5 feet in width, 2 feet thick) in front of them to block incoming attacks. If against a fire element spell it is much weaker than normal. It can block up to 2 base level spells and one D rank spell. However if a flame spell, only one base level spell is necessary to melt through the ice barrier. .
Cooldown: 2 post


Ice Mold: Claws
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 5
Type: Offensive/Utility
Element: Ice
Range: Self
Requirements: None
Effect: The user coats their hands in long and sharp claws reaching up to 2 feet in length. These claws are extremely sharp, being able to scratch metal. Though they can be broken through by a max of 1 base level opposing spell, it is mainly used for hand to hand combat, against weapons it can be stand up to 2 weapon attacks, a third being enough to shatter it.
Cooldown: 2 post


Ice Mold: Sparrow
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Utility
Element: Elemental alignment
Range: all ranges
Requirements: None
Effect: The user makes a little bird around the size of 6 inches tall, made of ice, it acts just as a normal bird, it can deliver messages to and from anywhere the caster has been. It can even use to spy as the sparrow records data within itself that only the caster can see/decipher. The bird can fly up to 25 meters away at a speed of 15 mph before it starts melting away.
Cooldown: 2

[Heero Villenn]

magic: take out the side effect. Ice magic does not require a side effect.

Senbon Shower:
As a versatility method: I suggest starting off with firing one needle at 15 meters at 10 m/s (11 mph). Senbon shower could be an upgraded ability of this attack. The cooldown could also be 1 with this method.

either way: Senbon shower is denied for potential power.

wings: As this is a base spell I can only permit gliding. also, the wings will melt or break after a certain amount of time. State how many posts it lasts. Also, the spell costs 10. Maintenence costs 5 every other turn afterwards.

barrier: Determine how many spells it can block. at base level. I'd say 2 base spells and 1 d-rank spell(since it's ice). It can not block any fire element magic.

claws: also need a duration. how many direct attacks can the spell withstand. lower cooldown to 2.


sparrow: How far can the sparrow go? I'd say only 25 meters before breaking or melting. lower the cooldown to 2.

all spells: great lack of detail. Get more detailed in your descriptions.

[Erik Cecere]

Magic: Approved

Senbon Shower: Looks better now, however you have it listed as 11mph up to 15 meters? Could you please change one or the other so the measurements are the same, it's just for an easier understanding. Also, how strong is this needle? Does it smash against the enemy or does it stab into them, or does it scratch them? How weak is the projectile as well, can it be blown out of course using other magic, can another D-rank spell smash it? I'm not saying it has to be able to be destroyed this way, but please be specific about these things. As Heero said, detail is important in your descriptions.

Wings: Looks fine over all, but make sure to include the maintain cost in your magic. It should look something like this: "Magic Cost: 10 (5 to maintain)"
Again please include more detail on the wings, how sturdy are they? How easy are they to break? How many spells, and of what strength, would it take to smash them, does a certain type of magic break them easier, for example fire magic melting them?

Barrier: This spell looks good over all, however while you edit would you please specify "if a flame spell, only one BASE level spell is necessary"? Thank you. Otherwise, Approved.

Claws: Type should just be utility. Again looks fine over all, but please specify one opposing BASE level spell. Otherwise, Approved.

Sparrow: A small spelling error "bord" in the last sentence, I believe you mean bird? Also, what size exactly is this sparrow? up to what speeds can it fly at?



Your magic is good overall, but needs a last little bit of editing! If your spells seem weak not, please don't worry as they will get stronger when you upgrade them! If you are stuck in any way, please feel free to ask or read any other approved spells as an example! When you're ready for another review, make sure to bump! Thank you again!
~Erik

[Raine]

There fixed up! And for the bird, i used how big and fast actual sparrows are.

[Erik Cecere]

Senbon Shower: Approved
Wings: Approved
Barrier: Approved
Claws: Approved
Sparrow: Approved

1/2 approved, you'll have to wait for Heero to sign off on it though.

[Heero Villenn]

wings: 1 tier 1 spell or two base level spells to break.

claws: A steel weapon should be able to break ice, especially at base level. Take out that your claws can withstand weapon attacks for so long. You claws can take two weapon attacks. A third weapon attack will break them.

sparrows: 15 mph. Not 16 mph. :p

Everything else is fine.

personal suggestion: Since senbon shower has been downgraded to a single needle, you could change the name to simply senbon needle. This is not required.

[Erik Cecere]

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