Yami Shiatsu [Sand Magic]

[Yami]

Name: Sand Magic
Type: Caster
Element/Aspect: Sand
Description: Just as the name states, the user is able to manipulate sand by either forming it themselves or gathering it from the surrounding environment with the help of a spell, shaping it into a variety of forms for different purposes. This magic is quite versatile due to the fact that it can be used for both offense and defense.

Side Effects: N/A

Spells

Sand Wisp
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Offense/Defense
Element: Sand
Range: Ranged [21 ft]
Requirements: N/A
Effect: The user releases a small stream of sand aimed at their opponents head; more so the eyes at a speed of 5 m/s. If the attack is landed, the opponent will not be able to see for 1 post due to the sand being in their eyes.
Cooldown: 2 Post

Sand Slash
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Offense
Element: Sand
Range: Ranged [21 ft]
Requirements: N/A
Effect: The user manipulates the sand to create a scythe-shaped slicer, that's shot at the target at a speed of 5 m/s. If hit, it will cause blunt damage leaving a small bruise or two.
Cooldown: 2 Post

Sand Blast
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Offense
Element: Sand
Range: Ranged [25 ft]
Requirements: N/A
Effect: The user manipulates sand and focuses it around their fist, and then throws a massive blast of sand at the target. The blast of sand travels at 5 m/s and is 4 ft wide and 6 ft long. It causes blunt damage such as small cuts and bruises. Also, due to it's large size, it may be able to hit multiple targets.
Cooldown: 2 Post

Sand Sphere
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Defense
Element: Sand
Range: Self [20 ft circumference]
Requirements: N/A
Effect: The user manipulates sand to create a large sand barrier around themselves in the shape of a sphere. The sphere can protect up to 2 base spells.
Cooldown: 2 Post

Sand Shots
Tier: Base Spell
Sigils/Sigil Slots: 0/0
Magic Cost: 10
Type: Utility
Element: Sand
Range: Ranged [21 ft]
Requirements: N/A
Effect: Yami creates a dozen spheres made of sand from his sand. They spheres are 6 inches in diameter and travel at a speed of 5 m/s. If hit by these spheres of sand, the opponent will take blunt damage receiving a small bruise or two. The sand spheres disperse immediately after impact.
Cooldown: 2 Post

[Yami]

Done, now ready to be checked ^^

[Sokuseki]

Sand Wisp: Just needs a speed. 5 m/s should be good.

Sand Slash: Approved

Sand Blast: Start this one at 5 m/s since it's larger but deals the same damage as Slash.

Wall: You say it's created in front of you, yet it has a circumference? I picture this as more of a rectangular prism of sorts than a cylinder.

Sand Manipulation: After talking it over with some other staff members, the ability to control sand in the radius is ok, but the extra damage is a no as it's stated. Percentages for damage are too vague to implement, so perhaps an exact description (such as a certain increase in spell mass or velocity) which would increase the amount of force would be better than a percentage.

^Pardon my grammar if it was bad in that last bit; 7 hours of sleep over 2 days woot~!

[Yami]

Bump, removed the spell buff in the last spell.

[Game Master]

Sand Wisp: Properly label the speed please. 5 m/s not 5 m.

Sand Blast: You didn't change it to 5 m/s.

Sand Wall: xD A wall is considered a rectangular shape, not a circle/sphere. Choose a wall or sphere. A wall can be used to block from one direction (which would ideally be in front of you), or the sphere can protect your entire body (similar to Gaara's sphere of sand) but you cannot see your surroundings.

Sand Manipulation: Hmm... I really don't get this spell. It's basically your magic so I suggest you get rid of this spell and make something else.

[Yami]

Bump.

Sorry about this, usually I can do better than this.

[Game Master]

Sand Wisp: Please choose one post or two posts for the debuff.

Sand Blast: Approved.

Sand Wall: Drop the word "wall" from this spell.

Sand Shots: I think two dozen is too much for a base spell. A dozen should be good. Just fix that and it's good.

And no problem. It happens.

[Yami]

Bump

[Game Master]

Congratulations! Your magic is fully approved. Have fun! This has now been moved to the Public Archives.

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